Tuesday, July 14, 2015

Fix my first chapter...



 tell me how to fix this.........
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       A young farmer dismounted a tractor in a field and walked in the heat of the day to a shady yard next to clapboard unpainted frame house.
       Walking to an outdoor water spicket, where a fresh towel hung on an abondond pump handle, he  turned on the water, twisting the squeaky water valve. Bending to wash his hands, splash his face and neck, he heard a screen door slam. Eyes closed he felt around for the towel. Holding a baby the farmer’s wife passes him the the towel. He wipes his face and the lets out a holler of extreme joy. His eyes opened and he sees his son laughing. They make faces at one another. “Peek-a-boo.”
       “Here Daddy, play with him a few minutes?” she said. He takes the baby into his arms. Patting both on the head, she runs back in the house. The farmer raises the baby to the sky.
       “Billy, want to play baseball?
       “BaBa.”
       “Baseball.”
       “Baboo.”

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