I heard him speak and I study and dis
cuss his book At
www.fictionworkout.com
Sunday, October 4, 2015
Sunday, August 2, 2015
Go your own way...
Rob Parnell my internet friend sent me a news letter.....
Its always a joy to hear from him... but going your own way in important....
I have to study, experiment, try to emulate the past, the present.... then go my own way...
Then stir slowly and start over.... LEON DAVIS
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Best regards and keep writing.
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Hi Leon,
Greetings and felicitations! Glad you're still
with me. Only two more lessons to go!
Lesson Eight
"Go Your Own Way"
Believe it or not, I get many messages from
students asking me to clarify what OTHER English
and creative writing teachers have said to them.
Now, I have to be careful with my replies in these
situations. Not least because I don't want to
start needless arguments about what's right and
what's wrong when it comes to fiction writing!
Its always a joy to hear from him... but going your own way in important....
I have to study, experiment, try to emulate the past, the present.... then go my own way...
Then stir slowly and start over.... LEON DAVIS
kkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
Best regards and keep writing.
rob@easywaytowrite.com
Creating better Writers
http://easywaytowrite.com
The Easy Way to Write, PO Box 485, Morphett Vale, SA 5162
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Hi Leon,
Greetings and felicitations! Glad you're still
with me. Only two more lessons to go!
Lesson Eight
"Go Your Own Way"
Believe it or not, I get many messages from
students asking me to clarify what OTHER English
and creative writing teachers have said to them.
Now, I have to be careful with my replies in these
situations. Not least because I don't want to
start needless arguments about what's right and
what's wrong when it comes to fiction writing!
Monday, July 20, 2015
It Is Bueatiful
Some description I like ...at the beginning of a book... or even a random thought that has a chance of entrancing the reader ...and also I like suggestive ideas and thoughts that connect to the next scene...this lets the reader know.......I'm telling you a story and I do know what I am doing....so in addition to the theme of the over all story ( the message you want your reader to consider in your over all tale) another message says DON'T WORRY... this will be worth you time.
Of course... this is my goal ... this is what I aspire to. Community is a special way we progress... it's beautiful... it's ugly ... and if we don't give up it's beautiful...
Of course... this is my goal ... this is what I aspire to. Community is a special way we progress... it's beautiful... it's ugly ... and if we don't give up it's beautiful...
Thursday, July 16, 2015
Just by chance.......?
When I got an email ad about the MASTER Class with James Patterson ... I bought in. It is so inspiring it is the best thing to being his friend in real life, no better. It is a personal injection of his thoughts and ideas and from a GREAT AMERICAN who happens to be a GREAT WRITER.
The best lesson for me has been JP on Outlines. And Scenes and Sequels. By Steve Alcorn...posted on my FB is the link. When I open my course it always starts there.... like magic....like do this... study and listen to every word... so I did and do...it inspires me and reminds me. The Group is awesome... they compare notes and share critiques.
The late Jack M. Bickham published
Bickham, Jack (1999-03-15). Elements of Fiction Writing - Scene & Structure (Kindle Location 3051). Writer's Digest Books. Kindle Edition.
If you have unlimited kindle this book can been had to free with your membership. This is a support for to any one who writes.
The best lesson for me has been JP on Outlines. And Scenes and Sequels. By Steve Alcorn...posted on my FB is the link. When I open my course it always starts there.... like magic....like do this... study and listen to every word... so I did and do...it inspires me and reminds me. The Group is awesome... they compare notes and share critiques.
The late Jack M. Bickham published
Bickham, Jack (1999-03-15). Elements of Fiction Writing - Scene & Structure (Kindle Location 3051). Writer's Digest Books. Kindle Edition.
If you have unlimited kindle this book can been had to free with your membership. This is a support for to any one who writes.
Tuesday, July 14, 2015
Rob Parnell's Easy Way to Write: How To Write and FINISH Long Works
Rob Parnell's Easy Way to Write: How To Write and FINISH Long Works: Writing short pieces - say up to around 5000 words - is fairly straightforward. You can, in most cases, just start writing and kee...
Fix my first chapter...
tell me how to fix this.........
1
A young farmer dismounted a tractor in a field and walked in the
heat of the day to a shady yard next to clapboard unpainted frame house.
Walking to an outdoor water spicket, where a fresh towel hung
on an abondond pump handle, he turned on
the water, twisting the squeaky water valve. Bending to wash his hands, splash
his face and neck, he heard a screen door slam. Eyes closed he felt around for the
towel. Holding a baby the farmer’s wife passes him the the towel. He wipes his
face and the lets out a holler of extreme joy. His eyes opened and he sees his
son laughing. They make faces at one another. “Peek-a-boo.”
“Here Daddy, play with him a few minutes?” she said. He takes
the baby into his arms. Patting both on the head, she runs back in the house.
The farmer raises the baby to the sky.
“Billy, want to play baseball?
“BaBa.”
“Baseball.”
“Baboo.”
Saturday, July 11, 2015
Act 1 The Hook
Leon Davis.... The
real story is in the middle...the first Act is: hook, set up, background ... then
something happens to the protagonist that kicks off the long...quest or struggle of ACT II. THE Trigger...or turning plot point introduces and triggers events... the logical thread
The Hook....Has a purpose that needs to be understood, if we are writing commercial fiction. My observation is it shows the reader you can fulfill the expectation of a good story. In other words, here you sell the story and your ability to write a compelling tale. Most people, new to writing fiction, struggle with this. Don't worry or fret, this is where you send a message to the real YOU...
I have instructed the real me... COMOS. YOU plus the COSMOS is the . COMOS... When we find that access and tap into the harmony of the COSMOS we gain what wise folks through the ages searched for. It will appear different on the surface, but it's your way home, to truth the light of understanding. Begin like a child. You don't need a special book or school or status. and there are many ways to do this... there are guides to writing a hook ... many resources. Instruct yourself and you will find you are smarter than you were before. You are in action, and you are being guided by the harmony of the universe... now don't quit your day job. But don't stop learning reading and writing.
Let's say our goal is to write better fiction...
A method we jump on is to get lost in our imaginations... yes , good, that is OK.. but it but move from chaos to order.
That's what the Cosmos is all about... order of the highest degree, of the highest purpose, this is you resource and guide. It's part of creation. Like gravity. Energy. So we study human analysis and we compare it to the message we hold as self evident.
All men are created equal , not exactly but under the theme of the Constitution we form a nation dedicated...in theory to strive to make it so... it is like a prayer. Our founders programed themselves to seek truth, justice and pass a system that had a chance of perfecting it.
When I write I try to write something that takes a short term idea and a long term theme....
This is why I study what writer's write and what thy say about writing. I don't take anything at face value but test it... in the lab of knowledge, logic, and long term consequence.
The Hook....
L. Brooks says....The mission is not to fully introduce the story's main antagonistic force, but rather, to foreshadow it. If Part 1 does show antagonistic force at all, it shows only part of it, without explaining what it means. And it's not to show the reader the big inciting incident in the first few pages — that's called a hook, which is an important part of the setup.
Let's look at an example. In the first few pages of a story we might see someone following the hero, though the hero remains unaware. This presents tension and conflict, because we fear for
the hero's safety. It's a great hook and it foreshadows the conflict of the story. But it doesn't mean anything yet. We don't understand how this conflict, this antagonist force, will thrust the hero down a certain path in quest of a specific outcome, or what the stakes of that quest will be. Larry Brooks (2011-01-27). Story Engineering (p. 146). F+W Media, Inc.. Kindle Edition.
This is a great writer's manual and I wish I could discuss it page by page. I have read it for 5 years.... talking about the nuts and bolts of writing is like being a evangelist. But I believe someday I will write a book people will read, and then they will wonder how that happened.
something happens to the protagonist that kicks off the long...quest or struggle of ACT II. THE Trigger...or turning plot point introduces and triggers events... the logical thread
The Hook....Has a purpose that needs to be understood, if we are writing commercial fiction. My observation is it shows the reader you can fulfill the expectation of a good story. In other words, here you sell the story and your ability to write a compelling tale. Most people, new to writing fiction, struggle with this. Don't worry or fret, this is where you send a message to the real YOU...
I have instructed the real me... COMOS. YOU plus the COSMOS is the . COMOS... When we find that access and tap into the harmony of the COSMOS we gain what wise folks through the ages searched for. It will appear different on the surface, but it's your way home, to truth the light of understanding. Begin like a child. You don't need a special book or school or status. and there are many ways to do this... there are guides to writing a hook ... many resources. Instruct yourself and you will find you are smarter than you were before. You are in action, and you are being guided by the harmony of the universe... now don't quit your day job. But don't stop learning reading and writing.
Let's say our goal is to write better fiction...
A method we jump on is to get lost in our imaginations... yes , good, that is OK.. but it but move from chaos to order.
That's what the Cosmos is all about... order of the highest degree, of the highest purpose, this is you resource and guide. It's part of creation. Like gravity. Energy. So we study human analysis and we compare it to the message we hold as self evident.
All men are created equal , not exactly but under the theme of the Constitution we form a nation dedicated...in theory to strive to make it so... it is like a prayer. Our founders programed themselves to seek truth, justice and pass a system that had a chance of perfecting it.
When I write I try to write something that takes a short term idea and a long term theme....
This is why I study what writer's write and what thy say about writing. I don't take anything at face value but test it... in the lab of knowledge, logic, and long term consequence.
The Hook....
L. Brooks says....The mission is not to fully introduce the story's main antagonistic force, but rather, to foreshadow it. If Part 1 does show antagonistic force at all, it shows only part of it, without explaining what it means. And it's not to show the reader the big inciting incident in the first few pages — that's called a hook, which is an important part of the setup.
Let's look at an example. In the first few pages of a story we might see someone following the hero, though the hero remains unaware. This presents tension and conflict, because we fear for
the hero's safety. It's a great hook and it foreshadows the conflict of the story. But it doesn't mean anything yet. We don't understand how this conflict, this antagonist force, will thrust the hero down a certain path in quest of a specific outcome, or what the stakes of that quest will be. Larry Brooks (2011-01-27). Story Engineering (p. 146). F+W Media, Inc.. Kindle Edition.
This is a great writer's manual and I wish I could discuss it page by page. I have read it for 5 years.... talking about the nuts and bolts of writing is like being a evangelist. But I believe someday I will write a book people will read, and then they will wonder how that happened.
Friday, July 10, 2015
The set-up? the Hook what is it all about?
Brooks, Larry (2011-01-27). Story Engineering (p. 166). F+W Media, Inc.. Kindle Edition. In The Da Vinci Code, the hook is a dead guy on the floor of the most famous art museum in the world, with a cryptic message written in his own blood. That's something you don't see in your everyday mystery.
Brooks, Larry (2011-01-27). Story Engineering (p. 166). F+W Media, Inc.. Kindle Edition.
Leon Davis That's why working with a outline of description and directions to yourself like in J.P. classes ....you can picture what you need at each part of an Act. This will give you a better book and save time, he says. I know he is right.
The set up for Patterson's Honeymoon was very good too. read it on Amazon It was a BESTSELLER in 2009 or there 'bouts.
Writing Your Novel , Really?
First I need to know my Passion to write mine. Do you know yours? Think about that, paper crafting, the Civil War, the Peace Movement of the 60's, religion. The CAFR report , black opps, green opps, greed , charity?
It needs to be your passion, the thing you spend your money on, the thing you study.... and feel a need to continue studying.
Everyone wants world peace and prosperity, but would you lay down your life for it? Would you share your wealth for it...? back later...
It needs to be your passion, the thing you spend your money on, the thing you study.... and feel a need to continue studying.
Everyone wants world peace and prosperity, but would you lay down your life for it? Would you share your wealth for it...? back later...
Thursday, July 9, 2015
raw ideas....
Sweeter
as The Days Go By ( under the bed} ring any bells. It's a game we
played in Church while the preacher was shouting as the top of his
lungs....
I like to skim best sellers on Amazon
[50 shades] and and change the titles arouund Fifty shades of...
FIFTY MINNIONS OF MURDER
SHEETS OF SLAUGHTER
WINE WABBITS WASTING
RICH RABBITS WASTING ...man meets... woman... He’s got a great
job but travels a lot...they move into a mansion too big for
anybody...she’s happy, he’s home every Thursday night and
leaves Sunday after Church.
They raise and breed show dogs.... They raise and breed
horses.... The animals
are put in an experimental government funded program...that
induces early birth and puts the living unborn animals into
simulated wombs that holds it until it is fully formed. She
becomes pregnant and he brings in a so called specialist from
Mexico. The baby has to be aborted after two months and
becomes immediately pregnant with her second child.
[ who should she be to make this work]
The twist...she leads two lives ...she is the Mad industrialist
...she sets up a lab on the
estate out of bordom and lonliness and and then ....and then
along comes what...who..?
I like to skim best sellers on Amazon
[50 shades] and and change the titles arouund Fifty shades of...
FIFTY MINNIONS OF MURDER
SHEETS OF SLAUGHTER
WINE WABBITS WASTING
RICH RABBITS WASTING ...man meets... woman... He’s got a great
job but travels a lot...they move into a mansion too big for
anybody...she’s happy, he’s home every Thursday night and
leaves Sunday after Church.
They raise and breed show dogs.... They raise and breed
horses.... The animals
are put in an experimental government funded program...that
induces early birth and puts the living unborn animals into
simulated wombs that holds it until it is fully formed. She
becomes pregnant and he brings in a so called specialist from
Mexico. The baby has to be aborted after two months and
becomes immediately pregnant with her second child.
[ who should she be to make this work]
The twist...she leads two lives ...she is the Mad industrialist
...she sets up a lab on the
estate out of bordom and lonliness and and then ....and then
along comes what...who..?
Wednesday, July 8, 2015
Use Your Imagimation Write a Story
Pants...plot? Let's change the conversation, I can find a way. I will do what it takes.
Not all writer's think like Larry Brooks in Story Engineering. But his observations are spot on.
It helps to read fiction, and tell yourself a story.... believing you can do it. With persistent
practice most things can come to fruition.
How does this happen? ... we must reset our minds... back to default...become as children...be re-born.. to a Cosmic mindset.......
I think many new writers believe Steven King is a pantser.... they see him waking and writing stories off the top of his head, like skill and talent are the sole possesion of the prodigy. Or the genetically perfect mind.
I believe in the saying...
"Raise up a child in the way he should go and when he is old he will no depart from it..."
this idea holds a lot of water with me, because I can see that it is proven in many cases...
not and a mathematical equation but as an artistic or spiritual axiom. The prodigy is rare
more than the frog hair.
The path is long and narrow and few will find their way. As adults we must humble ourselves
to the task. We begin as children and ask for help. We internalize the system that seeks chasos,
and provides, sorts, molds and transforms chaos into harmony.
Hmm... A killer thriller? Is grandma coming out of the house with an axe in next scene?
"I'll
give ya' peek-a-boo," wife snarled as she returned from house, dangling
a photo of some scantily-clad redhead that she'd found in her hub's
dresser when putting his folded laundry away. But that really wouldn't
be a thriller, unless it had a time element to it, would it?
Oh, no, not that Uncle Bob! He has a dungeon in his basement and, well, …..
when he is holding up the baby. Then
have the wife scream. Now you're on your way. smile emoticon
Leon
this opening thus far is well-written but does not make the reader
wonder what is going to happen next so if that is your goal I agree that
some foreshadowing or conflict has to be introduced. Also paragraph
when you change speakers and etc. but I'm sure at this moment you don't
give two frogs legs about grammar etc.
Not all writer's think like Larry Brooks in Story Engineering. But his observations are spot on.
It helps to read fiction, and tell yourself a story.... believing you can do it. With persistent
practice most things can come to fruition.
- 1. the point at which a plan or project is realized the plans have come to fruition sooner
- than expected
- 2. the realization of a plan or project
- 3. the state or action of producing fruit
Dictionary
cosmos
noun cos·mos \ˈkäz-məs, 1 & 2 also -ˌmōs, -ˌmäs\
1
2
: a complex orderly self-inclusive system
I think many new writers believe Steven King is a pantser.... they see him waking and writing stories off the top of his head, like skill and talent are the sole possesion of the prodigy. Or the genetically perfect mind.
I believe in the saying...
"Raise up a child in the way he should go and when he is old he will no depart from it..."
this idea holds a lot of water with me, because I can see that it is proven in many cases...
not and a mathematical equation but as an artistic or spiritual axiom. The prodigy is rare
more than the frog hair.
The path is long and narrow and few will find their way. As adults we must humble ourselves
to the task. We begin as children and ask for help. We internalize the system that seeks chasos,
and provides, sorts, molds and transforms chaos into harmony.
Leon, maybe an episode of "Father Knows Best?" Not feeling the tension or being gripped by fear with this.
Leon Davis That's what I was going for.
It should be the next scene that scares the S___ out of you.
Leon Davis Or the next...
Leon Davis no mom and dad are killed in a car crash
Or the wife comes out dragging a tied up person either dead or alive depending upon where you want to go.
Leon Davis no the boy is suddenly 10 years
Leon Davis and he meets his new family and moves in with uncle Bob
Leon Davis not so fast big boys...this is not a quickie..
I see that I can't type quickly enough.
Missed prior comments while trying to complete my own.
Leon Davis no he's a great guy. Sends Billy to school, little league and law school and teaches him to stay away from girls...
Teaches him to stay away from girls? Is this a sequel to "Mission Impossible?"
Leon Davis ask Billy to run his restaurant and oversee his business affairs...
Leon Davis ...uncle Bob sponsors a young girl from the old country and sends he to Chef and Restruant management...Jeanie McDoogle
Leon Davis something happen to Billy that changes every thing...
Leon Davis Uncle Bob is found near dead and taken to the hospital...only Billy knows how rich he is and how to run all his business.
Leon Davis If
it doesn't sound like a page turner ...there are no pages, only the
three basic points of Act I...hook, line, and sinker. Some call hook
back ground and trigger. Plus the flaw of the protagonist. Billy's flaw
is in sceen one act one...but it's not understood by anyone but me and
who ever finishes the book.
Leon Davis the
scenes can not be written until I know the story, the hook and
background can not be polished, the foreshadows all will be conceived
and inserted when the story's PLOT is known. The flaws of the different
characters will become apparent and plotted to make the character arc.
The goals of the characters...but the story will be about the arc of
William Drury McLane.
Leon Davis Act
one will end with Uncle Bob Unable to move or talk. Act II begins with
Billy in charge of Uncles Bob's Tavern and restaurant and businesses
built up in Chicago over 20-30 years. Act II begins with Billy full of
self doubt...the CRISIS in his mind is he has lost his Mentor who could
come back to health and be disappointed with him if he isn't very
careful. The amount of wealth Billy is responsible for is enormous.
Leon Davis thank you
Leon Davis Billy
was orphaned at 10. Loves baseball is was poured into him as a baby...
he becomes very good at it but losing the contact of his base ball
mentor, he is twisted a little bit. Then with no mother he is mentored
by his father's brother.Uncle Bob...p...See More
Leon Davis the
Act One tender scene has a purpose... it may take a twist but it is not
yet possible to efficiently write it ....until I map the struggle
against the antagonist and Billy McLean's self destructive
behavior...ending in the epiphany that brings him to a realization his
own behavior/ thinking/ misconception was holding him back...now he know
what he must do...
Leon Davis His
flaw is his attachment to the father figure, and not testing and
learning the need for autonomy. Has missed natural development for a
man. He has lost his father an mother ......loses the continuity of a
happy life..... he recovers but is warped living in a tavern and seeing
the duality of life before he can process it maturely.... reaches adult
hood a bubble off plumb... one brick short of a load... NOW his flaw is
holding him back.... obedience to a failing authority.... he misses
baseball, Mom, apple pie, thinks what must he do ....if he marries the
cook he violates the instructions of Uncle. Into this story line I must
mix MURDER, SEX, Crime, failure, defeat near ruin. Uncle Bob ...is
bedridden Bob want to marry , Uncle Bob was wasting for Billy to grow up
and be a man. They decide to give most of the ill-gotten fortune to
Create public institutions... create jobs promote peace by teaching
people to find it within them selves first... and pass it on...The
Antagonist - Greed- presonified by ? As yet un con-cieved Villian.
Leon Davis Maybe I should add a puppy. Or a special idem that was in Biyy's posession when his parents are killed?
Leon Davis He was tiring to say Baseball...
Leon Davis You mean like "BABA" what did he say daddy?
Leon Davis He knows three words mama BABA And Strike
Leon Davis Ok
, I' m trying to outline the antagonist....The kid is being programed
for a strong positive attitude...but it is dependant on his
parents...they are taken away.... Later Uncle Bob... is very
influential..
Leon Davis then Uncle has a stroke...I want antagonist ...I don't see him yet..
Leon Davis The villian must be complex maybe he is on old aqaintence of uncle.
Leon Davis I always thought it was me making waves
Leon Davis Take your water wings...Raining in Chicago great day for a villian
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